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Believe me, there is an entire poem here.
You just can't see it.
Heck, I can't even see it to be honest with you.
Why?
Well because chances are I don't even know what to say,
Or I'm just choosing not to say anything.
Why?
Well because chances are that some one will just come along and contradict me,
Saying that I don't know what I'm saying---as usual.

Whatever.
I don't really care.
After all, I really AM just a childish, immature boy.
Who doesn't think before they speak.

That being said,
Do you see the words that are here?
What's there to say? Nothing here apparently.
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:icongotterdam16:
Gotterdam16 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Student General Artist
this is one brilliant way to explain what goes in many people's heads most of the day
namely mine
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:icondevilkid-chan:
DevilKid-chan Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't see the words, I see a teddybear with a machine gun constellation....
....But in spite of my messed-up psyche, this is a cool thing to do. :)
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:iconheystopstaring:
Heystopstaring Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2012
...S'cuse me, I gotta ponder this for a while.
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:iconthemoormaiden:
TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What an original idea, I love it. :D You're right; sometimes there really isn't anything to say, or at least nothing that can be said with words.
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:iconvallyfullofemotions:
vallyfullofemotions Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very well written! ^.^ good job! I like the flow and style! :D
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:iconnatirey7:
natirey7 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Student Writer
very different. amazing.
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:iconmilkfist:
Milkfist Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Student Photographer
:clap:
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:iconanimazingme:
animazingme Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Student Writer
:thumbsup:

unique! :D
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:iconjoel55555:
joel55555 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is rather new! I like it.
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:icondimeforthedevil:
DimefortheDevil Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Really really nice! It's so creative, I had to read it twice. I love the variety of punctuation in the first part. :)
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:iconathinia:
Athinia Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No, I don't see the words.

But I do see the message, and it's made me think.
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Really well done. Creative genius,
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:iconthe-dormant-sprite:
The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Student Writer
are you joking?
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Hmmm?
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Find me a poem that's been done like this before and I'll concede it's not creative. But so far, I haven't seen anything that uses this kind of style to attain the meaning it has. It may not be as eloquent as it could be, but it makes a point and it makes it well. The poetry format that's used for the punctuation also defines almost every emo poem ever written... which is nice :)
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Student Writer
every "emo" poem i've ever read lacks originality, creativity, and technique. i fail to see the positive there. and the meaning is superficial at best. the "style" is the artistic equivalent of a blank canvass hanging in a gallery.
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
The poem isn't intended to be "emo" at all. All the poem is trying to reflect is the lack of words I had at the moment to say. I had several things rushing through my mind, but no way to say them, or I at least couldn't think of a way.

This is the first time that I have ever done something like this, so to me, it's pretty good. Yes that opinion is biased seeing as I'M the one who wrote it, I know.

But I mainly replied to say that the poem is NOT intended to be emo or show any signs of depression or bad feelings. If anything the poems is being sarcastic in the 3rd "real" stanza. This is based off of a true story that happened earlier in the day that day, and I simply had nothing to say to them about the subject matter other than "okay," "I see," and "what?". Stuff like that.

No, I am not mad, and frankly I'm glad someone doesn't see this as that good, because it'll help me make much better improvements in the future. Now I agree with Panmiro when they say that they haven't ever seen a poem like this done---I haven't either, so to me as well, it's new, original, and unique.

But what I'm really stressing is that the poem isn't meant to be emo in any sort of way, and if that's the way it came off to some people, then I need to work on how th epoem is perceived by others.
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
I did not mean to imply the poem was emo. My apologies for that. I was simply noting that the absence of words allowed you to interpret them to match up with any poetry you didn't like (in my case, emo poetry) and poked a bit of fun at them. My interpretation: that's all. I think it's creative, and I think the blank space is an ingenious device. I shouldn't have interpreted your work for you, I also apologize for that. That doesn't change the fact that the poem has an Innate grace and expresses itself well

As for my over-analysis :P sorry I go a bit overboard sometime. I'll try not to go all literary-analyst on your other work.

I don't think there's anything else for me to say.
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Nah you don't really need to apologize, if at all. You weren't interpreting anything "for me," you were interpreting it the way you thought it was to be interpreted, the way in which you thought the poem was saying.

So yeah, you don't really have a need to be sorry. We all over-analyze at some point or another, and it's always kind of interesting to me to see what other people think I'm trying to, or am saying, in my work. :)
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Thanks. Better safe than sorry though.
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Student Writer
you have a very good outlook on your work. kudos for that. i was mostly commenting on the ridiculousness of the aforementioned "creative genius" notion. not to say you don't have potential.
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Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
That's exactly it, if you can sum up an Emo poem in a few punctuation marks it shows exactly how cliche it is. It's not exactly meant to exalt the genre, rather it makes fun of it. And as for the meaning, there isn't any deep meaning and that's the point, a lot of poetry has no deep meaning it's just jumbles of words thrown together at random when there's nothing to say, so what does it matter if that's blank or not? The poem's also rather accurate:

"because chances are that some one will just come along and contradict me,
Saying that I don't know what I'm saying---as usual."

Now what we're you just doing? Ah yes... :)
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The-Dormant-Sprite Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Student Writer
you misspelled were. and i was pointing out the below average technique with which this poem was written. and i think you drew too much irony from the poem according to the author's explanation.
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
I'm curious to know what exactly the "below average technique" part is of the poem. I've never had that kind of comment before, so I'm a little bit confused there.
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
I think the technique fits the poem. I like it. What can I say?
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
*were just doing. Damn, typos in the middle of snarky comments remove the snark. :P Ah well. It was supposed to be snarky
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:iconpanmiro:
Panmiro Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Of course, I'm not the one who wrote the poem. I just find an innate grace in it.
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:icontsuki-kotei:
Tsuki-Kotei Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not sure... It seems the emotion in this poem has put words between your words that say "nothing".
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:iconfragul:
Fragul Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
I'm trying to find a picture amongst the punctuation.... like a constellation of stars :-)
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:iconshadowrunner240:
Shadowrunner240 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011   Writer
Nothing to say at all...

I spent about five minutes actually looking for the words. I kinda feel stupid now.
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:iconemolove-4ever:
EmoLove-4ever Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
holy shit. good job. sometimes there really is nothing to say...
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
Yeah I know right? It IS very odd sometimes to me. I just enjoy the silence of my voice on my lips. It's sort of odd and hard to explain.
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:iconemolove-4ever:
EmoLove-4ever Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
oh, i get it. i feel the same way. sometimes its good to just sit alone with nothing but the silence of your words and the nothingness around you.
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:iconcoraline123:
Coraline123 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011
.....(lost deep in enlightenment) hmmmm.....
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:iconimpaledbycats13:
impaledbycats13 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011
either its one big trick question or deep beyond my comprehension.either way,i like this:)
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:icondsoul13:
DSoul13 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Love it :] It's fun, and I love the hidden truth in it ^^;
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:iconrhubaton:
Rhubaton Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011
:D Gee, thanks.
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